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HMLS - Expose Your Magus by Furihime HMLS - Expose Your Magus by Furihime

Special assignment for :iconhmls:
Area 3 theme: "The first time your Magus discover their ability"

The first time Fras discover his telekinetic ability was when he was helping his family prepared for the opening of their cake shop. The kitchen utensils were flying towards him. He was surprised and confused that time. :icongawwplz:

Sorry for the BG, I don't have any idea how to make a kitchen :iconslamheadplz: Fras, why you must discover your ability in a place like that :icony-u-noplz:

Area 3 Duce - Fraser Archibalt (c) me

My area member submission :la:

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ok, it's my first time writing a real critique *A*
I'll start with the positive things:
The composition of the colors is magnificient. They all suit each other and create a nice harmony. The arrangement of movement is also perfect. With this it looks alive and quite real. The expression of the character just supports this. The used pattern in the background and in nearly every color expand the color range. I especially like the choice of the point of view /the angle. It allows to see more of background and character. For shading I've got only one word: excellent! You've got an incredible sense of where the shadows have to be and where light!

Now the negative things:
Something about those flying things disturbs me. They seem to be like an eye-catcher. It's hard to concentrate on the main character with this many details. They are well done but still: less is more.
The light effects in his eyes are a bit overdone. It looks a bit off. Eyes aren't normally the brightest spot on the body. (That's why I only gave 4.5 in both Vision and Impact.)

All in all: I can see your effort and hope you keep this great work up!

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The drawing it well done, love the eyes and colors. Eye are suppose to be defined(it shows a lot about the drawing and person)but also if to defined it will not look good or seems overpowering. Personally for me, i'm not to fond of really bright colors. They look great in certain things, in this case they look good, but maybe lightening them up just a tad will make it look a little better.(Honestly, i'm not to good with that, sorry. :-( ) I would work on outlining certain details such as the clothing and a bit of the background. I do think all the stuff flying around takes away from the picture and doesn't look good. Take away a few things and it won't appear so harsh or overpowering. Other than those, the drawing is good.
Hope to see more of your work, you have talent, just need practice to make it flourish. :-)
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OoPygmalion Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014
<3 very beaautiful!!
caynansantos Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013
very nice:)
Candelabragenius Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Student General Artist
I expose my Magus sometimes. But then I get kicked out of the bar.
Kanami87 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
Wow, just wow :)
sweetsweetsunshines Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
nice pic ^^ very dynamic 
mewasaur Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013
looks so cool.
anne-summer Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's really great.
TamykoHimeko Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Epic. Too great :love:
chaansan Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your art is so flawless *-*
YandereMilkShake Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love your work!!!! keep submiting good art!!!
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